OOC: First or Third?
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open_flameYou might have noticed, I've been experimenting with third person writing and RP. When I was given my crash course on Twitter by the infinitely patient @TheWatchmaker, I was taught in first because they play in first. They write in first. But as we all know (or should know, IMHO) they ARE Sylar. First person writing makes perfect sense when your muse is such a strong and defined aspect of your art. So I RPed in first, and when things moved to LJ, I continued to RP in first.
Learning about Liz, who is naturally impatient and intense, was different and challenging. Finding her voice was hard, and after pouring over cast commentary, every interview on YouTube, and every single comic I could steal from my husband, I got a decent feel for her. She's often based on me at my worst, or what I like to call my worst. That said, I don't think she's a self avatar, the little bitch pisses me off enough that I would commit myself if I acted like her.Wait, Liz committed herself....uh oh. ;)
I tried, and I hope succeeded in adapting Mignola's creation in a way he would find acceptable. It took many hours 'wasted' reading comics, taking notes, pouring over scripts with a highlighter, Googling her habits and mannerisms to find the emotional motivations behind them and then some. I am the proud owner of most every Hellboy and BPRD comic book now, as well as every novel and all 4 movies. What can I say, if you're going to do something, so it all the way.
The result? Frantic, spastic, short little bursts of thoughts, actions and motivations.
And therein is the problem I face. The writing style in first comes of as if Liz is writing it, and for the last 10 months, I thought was a very good thing. I could imagine handing Selma the words, and hear her voice saying it. (That's my 'test' by the way, if I can hear a PBs voice and see a PBs mouth forming the words after I write them, I click 'Post Comment')
But what if someone else, say ME were telling the story, which I am. What would I say to describe that this girl is doing? Would I pepper the actions with hesitations and self-doubt? Would I add 'maybe', 'perhaps', 'I guess,' or 'you know?' to everything to make sure I avoided conflict at all costs and keep myself as emotionally level as possible?
Hell no, I would not.
But I digress, as I often do at four o'clock in the morning when the coffee is working it's way through my blood stream. All this leads me to a couple of questions, which are below. So if you've played with Liz or read my fic, please vote. There should be plenty of examples of first and third in my history but in case there is not, below are some of my favorites. Comment too, if you want. But if you're a douche about it Liz is gonna cry or scream, and I'll have to bitch you out.
Thanks for taking the time to read all that, and all this. Don't ask me why I'm asking this, either. I have no idea. But it woke me up, so it must need addressing.
First
Fic:Come Home: Incident Number One (Bump in the Night Verse)
RP:Why did you go? (Bump in the Night Verse)
Third
Fic: The Last One (Bump in the Night Verse)
RP: Goodbye doesn't always mean the end. ( SWS - Bump in the Night Verse, Missing Scene)
[Poll #1562425]
Learning about Liz, who is naturally impatient and intense, was different and challenging. Finding her voice was hard, and after pouring over cast commentary, every interview on YouTube, and every single comic I could steal from my husband, I got a decent feel for her. She's often based on me at my worst, or what I like to call my worst. That said, I don't think she's a self avatar, the little bitch pisses me off enough that I would commit myself if I acted like her.
I tried, and I hope succeeded in adapting Mignola's creation in a way he would find acceptable. It took many hours 'wasted' reading comics, taking notes, pouring over scripts with a highlighter, Googling her habits and mannerisms to find the emotional motivations behind them and then some. I am the proud owner of most every Hellboy and BPRD comic book now, as well as every novel and all 4 movies. What can I say, if you're going to do something, so it all the way.
The result? Frantic, spastic, short little bursts of thoughts, actions and motivations.
And therein is the problem I face. The writing style in first comes of as if Liz is writing it, and for the last 10 months, I thought was a very good thing. I could imagine handing Selma the words, and hear her voice saying it. (That's my 'test' by the way, if I can hear a PBs voice and see a PBs mouth forming the words after I write them, I click 'Post Comment')
But what if someone else, say ME were telling the story, which I am. What would I say to describe that this girl is doing? Would I pepper the actions with hesitations and self-doubt? Would I add 'maybe', 'perhaps', 'I guess,' or 'you know?' to everything to make sure I avoided conflict at all costs and keep myself as emotionally level as possible?
Hell no, I would not.
But I digress, as I often do at four o'clock in the morning when the coffee is working it's way through my blood stream. All this leads me to a couple of questions, which are below. So if you've played with Liz or read my fic, please vote. There should be plenty of examples of first and third in my history but in case there is not, below are some of my favorites. Comment too, if you want. But if you're a douche about it Liz is gonna cry or scream, and I'll have to bitch you out.
Thanks for taking the time to read all that, and all this. Don't ask me why I'm asking this, either. I have no idea. But it woke me up, so it must need addressing.
First
Fic:Come Home: Incident Number One (Bump in the Night Verse)
RP:Why did you go? (Bump in the Night Verse)
Third
Fic: The Last One (Bump in the Night Verse)
RP: Goodbye doesn't always mean the end. ( SWS - Bump in the Night Verse, Missing Scene)
[Poll #1562425]
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